Sunday, 8 May 2011

Powder sky

The two vast oceans do collide outside
a land spread-eagled far before us lies.
Sky stretching arms beyond this reach out wide
as they embrace, a drawing for my eyes.
Clouds tumbling now across a powder sky
the sunlight deer are racing over hill.
My friend the wind is calling me up high
to dance he says would be the greatest thrill.
He breathes a playful song within my ears
a warm suggestion now he laughs at me.
His promise he will banish all my fears
if just I will release, my mind runs free.
I close my eyes so feeling soft caress
how does he always find a way to bless.

19 comments:

  1. Beautiful, Abi ~ I love the way you have personified the wind.

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  2. I can admire anyone who works within a classic form and does it so well. I have myself tried and not been able to grasp the power of language you have. Excellent!

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  3. To the Peters!

    Thank you so much for both your most kind comments!

    To find the words Beautiful and Excellent under my newly hatched sonnet is something very special.

    I consider myself very fortunate to have found such good people to share my poetry with :)

    Abi

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  4. my friend the wind is calling me up high..i like that...a relationship which makes one fly and dance...lovely

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  5. i want to dance with the wind, too. lovely imagery :)

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  6. wow this is lovely...i love nature...and all that it brings...intimate...

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  7. I detect subtle social criticism and really enjoyed your personification of wind, as a refreshing warm friend. Fine poem.

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  8. An able and adroit sonnet written in perfect iambic pentameter. Good use of imagery and rhyme and an ecstasy of nature. There is color in the wind, and seduction in all of nature that you capture brilliantly here. Thank you so much, Gay

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  9. Seductive and soothing. Nice One Shot.

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  10. 'breathes a playful wind' .. to 'dance' .. 'caressed' ..
    Ohhh beautiful Abi .. as a breath of freshest air ~ Lib @Libithina

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  11. I love it ... It feels so serene and magical!

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  12. It's beautiful how you bring all the elements together—a very sensual piece.
    Eden

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  13. I am almost lost for words...

    Thank you all so much for your wonderful comments!

    Gay, you made my day with yours, this is my first ever sonnet :)

    thank you again

    Abi

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  14. An accomplished poem demonstrating a sure touch and understanding of the beauty of the sonnet as a poetic form. Take these lines:

    "Sky stretching arms beyond this reach out wide
    as they embrace, a drawing for my eyes.
    Clouds tumbling now across a powder sky
    the sunlight deer are racing over hill."

    Simply perfect! Well done.

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  15. A beautiful sensory celebration in sonnet form of the Wind God. A gorgeous poem, Abi. Qurina x

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  16. Thanks Quirina :)

    As my Sonneteering sister I am most honoured you find this gorgeous.

    I look forward to yours as well.

    Abi x

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    James Rainsford has left a new comment on your post "Powder sky":

    An accomplished poem demonstrating a sure touch and understanding of the beauty of the sonnet as a poetic form. Take these lines:

    "Sky stretching arms beyond this reach out wide
    as they embrace, a drawing for my eyes.
    Clouds tumbling now across a powder sky
    the sunlight deer are racing over hill."

    Simply perfect! Well done.



    Posted by James Rainsford to The Linnet at 12 May 2011 19:24

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  18. This is a truly magical sonnet - keep writing them, you have a wonderful touch

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  19. Thanks Marousia :)

    I am hoping I can write another one soon!

    Abi

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