Sunday, 15 May 2011

Poppies



As I sit,  quietly watching
                     I see them rise
                              like paper butterflies
gently now,  before my eyes
                up from their sea of green
                         into your water colour painting
each one, carrying secret dreams
                      precious load destined
                              for those who choose freedom.



(Photo by Fee Easton @bootcoot photo prompt for Oneshotsunday @Onestoppoetry 15/05/11)
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13 comments:

  1. Monty15 May 2011 at 20:05

    "I see them rise / like paper butterflies / gently before my eyes. . ." woman. I love your flowing gentle rhymes in this wonderful take on that image :)

    Monty

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  2. dustus15 May 2011 at 20:12

    I really like the passage Monty quotes and would like to add that I think the ending has a nice ring to it— especially the last two lines which strike me as highly suggestive.

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  3. Sean Vessey15 May 2011 at 21:07

    Wonderful words. A fine tribute to the photo with great images.

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  4. Helena White15 May 2011 at 21:18

    Love the line like paper butterflies...

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  5. Anonymous15 May 2011 at 22:15

    This is a delightful, rather simplistic poem with beautiful, appreciative imagery woven into a rhythm that is a joy to read. That is, until we get to the final two lines, which, as Adam identifies, are so huge, it's astonishing they have come from the same poem. You leave your sting until the very end, and sign off leaving us pondering. They could mean such a lot, it's fantastic not knowing even where to begin! Great poem.

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  6. Martin15 May 2011 at 23:07

    Beautiful! I have a special relation to poppies since my early childhood. They remind me of butterflies bound to earth. (I just realized you had a similar thought ...) As I always say, I love their fragility and persistence.

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  7. Anonymous16 May 2011 at 00:01

    I believe this is the first time I've happened on your blog. What lovely images you paint. Hope to read more of your work. Victoria

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  8. Brian Miller16 May 2011 at 00:17

    big smile...great rhymes and beat to this one...and beauty in the imagery...that i could be one of them...

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  9. Anonymous16 May 2011 at 00:29

    I love the "paper butterflies" and imagining their "secret dreams". Lovely poem!

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  10. Glynn16 May 2011 at 02:40

    Each one of those flowers is indeed just like a butterfly, and a dream. Beautiful poem.

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  11. Quirina16 May 2011 at 10:31

    Beautiful and fragile, as those flowers are, is also the freedom we choose. Q x

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  12. Peter Wilkin16 May 2011 at 10:59

    Simply beautiful, Abi ~ your words drift along like poppies in a gentle breeze until, as several people have already mentioned, your final two lines catch us by surprise and send our thoughts & feelings soaring like a rabble of butterflies. This poem is SO good ... a competition-winning poem, I would say.

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  13. The Linnet18 May 2011 at 22:01

    Thank you all for your fantastic comments! :)

    Abi

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